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You are a student at a university in Brighton and are living in private accommodation and have not had hot water or heating for some time. The landlord’s workmen have tried to fix the problem but without success.

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Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing to you in
regards
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 to the ongoing problems with the hot
water
 service in the apartment at 7/26 Willisden Rd., Brighton. As you are aware the hot
water
 service has not been working since the 17th of December when I called to notify you of the
problem
. I appreciate that within a day you arranged for tradesmen to come to the flat to resolve the
problem
.
However
, after the workmen arrived without the appropriate tools for the job and after spending 10 minutes looking at the job advised that they were aware of the cause of the
problem
 and would return later in the day to fix it. They did not return until the 22nd of December when they advised that the
problem
 was different to what they first expected and would need to order
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new parts. On their return just after Christmas they replaced the thermostat and declared that the
problem
 was fixed, but we still have no hot
water
. I would appreciate it if you could
either
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arrange
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 workmen to come and either fix or replace the hot
water
 service before the 31st of December as we have guests coming to stay over New Year and would not wish them to fall ill. I look forward to your rapid response, Kind regards, Simon Smith
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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