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It is more important to invest in further education rather than to gain work experience after finishing university in order to find a good job. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write 250 words or more.

#education #gain #work #university #job
As the
numbers
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 of university graduates continues to increase, it can seem that there is no alternative but to continue one’s studies in order to be more attractive in the
job
market
, rather than to seek to gain practical work experience. To see how valid
this
 argument is, we have to look at both sides of the debate. First of all, let’s take a look at the first traditional route for university graduates. The main reason why people undertake an undergraduate degree is to give them a competitive edge in the
job
market
, as gaining a degree is seen
a
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guarantee of a certain level of mental ability. It is
then
 seen as necessary to combine
this
 intellectual training with practical,
real world
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work experience in order to become a viable and strong contender in the
job
market
. The alternative view
however
 argues that it is no longer enough merely to possess a standard university degree and practical work experience. The sheer
numbers
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 of graduates entering the labour
market
 each year means that it is vital to gain an additional competitive edge when applying for the more
sought after
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 positions with selective employers. So where does the truth lie? On the one
hand
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 there is the
time honoured
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 view that has long been the conventional and practical route to career success for young ambitious individuals.
On the other hand
, the view that the
job
market
 has never been more competitive and it is essential to aspire to much higher levels of competitive excellence. With
current
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 lack of jobs available in the labour
market
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market,
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 it seems inevitable that one has to gain additional qualifications which will prove to a potential employer that one is the right candidate for that very
job
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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