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Some people prefer to work same job throughout their life while others like to change jobs. To what extend do you agree or disagree

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It is often observed that some
people
willing
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 to stay in the same company for their entire life,
whereas
 there are some who
likes
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like
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 to switch over to other firms after a certain period. In my opinion, I agree to move to other
work
 to gain more knowledge and for better remuneration.
To begin
 with, moving to other conglomerates will help the person to learn new technology.
In other words
, they will have the opportunity to show their talents and improve their career growth. Being an employee in the same company will not have any technical growth and they must do the same monotonous
job
, but they will have the
job
 security.
Moreover
, switching to other concerns will enhance their cognitive and problem-solving skills to build their future.
For example
, in the Information Technology
field
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field,
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 most
of
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apply
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the
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people
 move to other multinational companies to get good exposure and prove their skills for their growth.
Thus
, joining other firms will provide
the
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a
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 platform for
the
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apply
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people
 to study and implement new things and ladder for their
career
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careers
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. Admittedly, switching to other firms will provide
hike
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a hike
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 in their salary.
That is
 to say that their education and experience in
the
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a
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 certain field will be in demand and
hence
 their wages will
also
get
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increased
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increase
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 when moving to another company. But there will not be any immediate increment in the amount when
people
willing
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are willing
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 to
work
 in the same
job
.
For instance
, a recent survey report provided by
Indian
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the Indian
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 government states that
people
 doing the same
work
 for ages are not getting any recognition and the increment in their salaries is less.
Therefore
, in order to survive in
this
 competitive world, earning
good
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 amount will make
the
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apply
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people
to
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apply
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live a moderate lifestyle which can be achieved by switching their jobs. In conclusion, I wholeheartedly agree
to change
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with changing
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the
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apply
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job
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jobs
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 after certain years because it will help them to
know
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learn
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 new information about their
work
 and to get increased salary packages which is essential for
survival
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the survival
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 of themselves and their families.
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