Over consuming sugar is unhealthy. Some people think that governments should take responsibility to control it. Others think that individuals should take responsibility of sugar intake.

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Excess usage of
sugar
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is very dangerous for one self. Some people are saying authorities to take action about it, and few people are arguing
this
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is a responsibility of a
people
Suggestion
person
how to use and how to
avaoid
stay clear from; keep away from; keep out of the way of someone or something
avoid
consuming more
sugar
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in day to day life. It's always necessary to dream for a healthy
life style
a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes
lifestyle
to keep
ourself
Suggestion
our self
healthy we
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healthy, we
do daily
work out
the activity of exerting your muscles in various ways to keep fit
workout
, running, yoga and other
activities but
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activities, but
whenever we see some sweet dishes we fall for it and start having those products which contains more
sugar
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in it, and that one bite ruined all our work out and running, because when we eat sweet dishes its a main cause to increase our weight, obesity and several other
illness
Suggestion
illnesses
. Government should take responsibility and introduce
sugar
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free products in
market
Suggestion
the market
so people can enjoy their favourite dishes without
compramising
making or willing to make concessions
compromising
to
thier
of them or themselves
their
taste, and we should
also
Linking Words
think about health and try to use as much as
sugar
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free products because consumption of excess amount of
sugar
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will lead to many health issues.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • over-consuming
  • unhealthy
  • government responsibility
  • control
  • sugar intake
  • taxes on sugary products
  • regulations
  • advertising
  • public health campaigns
  • associated risks
  • personal responsibility
  • self-discipline
  • dietary habits
  • advocating
  • nutrition information
  • empowers
  • informed choices
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