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Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold . To what extent do you agree or disagree ? Give reason for your answer and include,any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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Advertisement about the
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An advertisement about the
product
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 is very important for
company
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companies
a company
the company
 to introduce their
product
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 to
consumer
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consumers
the consumer
. It is necessary because people often buy some
product
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 that they recognize and feel familiar with it. I am convinced that high sales of popular
cunsumer
a person who uses goods or services
consumer
 goods reflect the
power
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 of
advertisement
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, and I am sure that people Will buy the
product
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eventhough
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even though
 they don't need it because the
power
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 of
advertisement
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. In daily activity, some people only buy the goods that
their
people in general
they
 need for basic of life.
Firstly
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, people only need something to eat and most important thing is the food contain nutrition for their body.
Secondly
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, people
also
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 buy clothes for cover their body. Clothes can cover people from
variety
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a variety
 of seasons.
Moreover
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, people
also
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 need a house for living, so they Will save in the house and continue their life.
On the other hand
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, there are several people who consume more than just for their life.
This
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 is evidence that many things they
own
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own, although
although
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 they don't need it. It happens because the
power
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 of
advertisement
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. Marketing
departement
a specialized division of a large organization
department
departments
 have
variety
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a variety
 of
strategy
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strategies
 to make something unimportant become important. To sum up, I
am agree
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agree
 with
statement
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the statement
 that
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advertisement
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the advertisement
have
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has
 significant
power
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 to control people for consume the
product
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eventhough
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even though
 they don't need it. The business Will run and the economic supply and demand Will be moving in daily activity

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