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Cashless transactions are order of the day. most of the people prefer using plastic money rather than cash. Do you think this trend will be useful for all action of the society. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

There is no iota of doubt that, many individuals prefer to utilise express
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,
debit
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and debit
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cards
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 for daily
transactions
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instead
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 of paper notes,
coin
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or coin
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 currency.
This
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 phenomenon is offering multifarious benefits to
People
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However
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, sometimes a couple of problems emerge
due to
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 some. The following paragraphs
would
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will
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 shed light on
Pros
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the Pros
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 and cons of cashless
transactions
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. To commence with the first notion that,
the
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apply
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plastic money is easy and convenient to use for purchasing
the
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apply
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goods from shopping malls and online.
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,
the
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debit
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 and credit
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 have
a
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apply
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terms and conditions for using
it
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them
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.
Like
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For
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 as: masses can enjoy discounts on shopping
while
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pay
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paying
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 the amount of money in terms of credit
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.
In addition
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to
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apply
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, there is
fear
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a fear
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 of robbery whenever a person has
a
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paper money at their place.
Where as
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,
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apply
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 the
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 provide better safety
as well as
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 security
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due to
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apply
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sometime
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sometimes
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 our card
is misplace
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is misplaced
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people
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 can
be
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suddenly
complaint
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complain
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 to
bank
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the bank
a bank
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for
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to
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 block their debit or credit card. On the flip side of
a
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the
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 coin, there are some nasty consequences as well because in many places
this
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 type of
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transactions
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transaction
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 cannot take place.
Firstly
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, the small shopkeepers and vegetable vendors did not have a swipe machine for payments.
Secondly
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, in some countryside
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areas
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area
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 sellers did not accept
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 because they
are
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were
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 not well educated. So, the proper knowledge is required for using the express
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 everyone cannot know about the use of
A.T.M
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the A.T.M
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 Machine and swipe machine.
Last
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 but not
the
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apply
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least, some problems
people
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 face daily like
as
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apply
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fraud cases on net banking
transactions
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. In conclusion, I personally believe that
this
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 trend will not
useful
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be useful
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 for all sections of the Community
Although
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, many folks are not aware
about
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of
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to
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how to
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 use
the
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apply
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electronic
transactions
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apply
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However
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,
the
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efforts should be made by
government
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the government
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 to minimise the robbery and fraud cases. So,
people
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 can
be enjoying
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enjoy
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 their life.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • plastic money
  • cybercrime
  • financial inclusion
  • digital divide
  • economic marginalization
  • contactless payment
  • two-factor authentication
  • mobile banking
  • secure encryption
  • transaction fees
  • financial literacy
  • underbanked
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