In Britain, when someone gets old they often go to live in a home with other old people where there are nurses to look after them. Sometimes the government has to pay for this care. Who do you think should pay for this care, the government or the family? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In my opinion, older people should live with families
thats
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that's
responsibility
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the responsibility
a responsibility
of each and every person in the family.
However
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, at
this
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current situation everyone in the world is running behind their
lifes
a characteristic state or mode of living
lives
, despite having
ecomical
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economic
economical
status no one has time for
social life
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a social life
.
in
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In
this
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senario
an outline or synopsis of a play (or, by extension, of a literary work)
scenario
people wants to live
with same
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with, same
age and mentality. Britain government is doing a great service
to
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in
taking
care
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of
elder
advanced in years; ('aged' is pronounced as two syllables)
older
people paying money for the
care
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. Practically, in the
britian most
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Britian, most
Britian most
brighten most
variation most
of the people when they start their
carrer
the particular occupation for which you are trained
career
careers
by that time started
to
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with
saving the money or paying the pension plans,
unfortunatly
by bad luck
unfortunately
,
their
in or at that place
there
are some people couldn't
efford
be able to spare or give up
afford
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this plans
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these plans
this plan
due to
financiail
involving financial matters
financial
unstability
an unstable order
instability
and non secured jobs.
but
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But
, still they paid the taxes to the government.
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
in my opinion
takinng
very attractive; capturing interest
taking
care
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of
elderly
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the elderly
is dual responsibility
og
connects a noun with the preceding word
of
government and Family.
For example
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: My aunt is a resident in
sheffield
a steel manufacturing city in northern England famous for its cutlery industry
Sheffield
so use to work as
a
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an
NHS
employee she has
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employee, she has
three
childern
a young person of either sex
children
and they are very busy running after their lives my aunt need to stay alone at home when they come back that making her more alone and she couldn't able to fight with her
desease
an impairment of health or a condition of abnormal functioning
disease
dishes
dress
.
she
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She
needs a moral support from experts like nurses who are available in the homes.
as
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As
per the doctor suggested they took her into
home
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a home
the home
for her better life.
Fortunatly she
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Fortunately, she
Fortunately she
cured and helping the other people in the
care
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..
Finally
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, Family and
governement
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
governments
should take the responsibility of elder people.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Aging population
  • Elderly care
  • Nursing homes
  • Social welfare
  • Intergenerational responsibility
  • Caregiving
  • Financial burden
  • Quality of life
  • Pension funds
  • Healthcare policy
  • Taxation
  • Subsidies
  • Private insurance
  • Long-term care
  • Sustainability
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