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The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. Do you agree or disagree Give reason for your answer and include any relevant example from your own knowledge or experience Write 250 words

#growth #shops #towns #cities #reason
imagine laying in your comfortable bed wearing comfy
payjamas
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pyjamas
 and buying that Gorgeous jacket from
ebay
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eBay
 or completing your office assignment drowned in the piles of paperwork
still
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 getting your
most
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favorite
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favourite
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 sandwich from Subway.
Thats
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 how convenient and fast life is with online shopping facilities. People now have a whole bunch of brands in their gadgets be it ZARA, NIKE or Pizza Hut, you name it and there's an app waiting to be downloaded
in
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 your phone or tablet.
Few
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 clicks done and you have that newly launched pair of shoes from
zara
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Zara
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 at
yiur
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your
door step
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doorstep
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. Online
market places
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marketplaces
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 have not only made shopping easier and
fast
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faster
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 but
also
 made
lives
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the lives
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 of introverts a lot more comfortable, at least now we do not have to be awkward when a sales staff personnel is glued to us
while
 choosing items. Most people do not like to visit physical outlets, there are many factors that affect
this
 situation. some of them are  • traffic & parking issues  • extensive physical activity for elderly people  • crowded outlets and many more reasons Having the best available produce on
yiir
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your
finger tips
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fingertips
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 is always a pleasure. The growth of virtual
market place
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marketplace
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 and online
stores
 is turning out to be
a
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 biggest reason for
closing
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the closing
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 of shops and
stores
. The biggest reason is the
cost to benefit
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cost-to-benefit
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 ratio. To run
a
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physical shops and
stores
 extensive overheads are incurred
such
 as lighting, music, staff cost, interior and rent. No matter if 1 or 100 customers visit
om
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on
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daily
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 basis the store has
yo
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to
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 bear fixed costs which fuel the declining profits. selling online is way
more
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cheaper as it gives the flexibility of
on point
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 service, when a customer is genuinely interested they can visit the
virual
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virtual
 store and purchase the items, companies
also
 buy bots to cater
the
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 queries and complaints of online customers which helps them provide more enhanced customer service. When there is no massive fixed cost attached the profits are higher comparatively. One real example of
dissolution
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 of physical outlets is FOREVER 21.
This
 apparel brand has shut its
stores
 and now
onmy
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focusing on online sales.
Few
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A few
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 more major example of online shopping boost is Amazon and Ali Express, these tech giants have challenged and distorted the idea of having physical
stores
. In my opinion, online shopping is the future and brands should now adapt to the changing environment
otherwise
 they'll be left as
devestated
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devastated
 as
Black Berry
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BlackBerry
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 was when
touch screen
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touchscreen
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smart phones
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smartphones
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 came into power.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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