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Some people think that it would be better for large companies and industry to move to regional areas outside large urban centres. Do you think the advantages of this proposition outweigh the disadvantages?

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Over the years, people living in rural areas struggle to find accessible facilities, employment and to find time travelling far to urban cities to accomplish their errands. Some people claim that huge companies and industries should be distributed to different regions rather than limiting it to urban
centers
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centres
. In my case, the merits far outweigh its drawbacks
peratining
be relevant to
pertaining
 to
this
 proposition. Arguably, a disadvantage of moving some facilities and companies to different regional area is the
undeniably
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undeniable
 cost of expenses. It can give financial burden not only to private
industries but
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industries, but
 to government funds as well. Another, it has a negative impact since it can harm the environment to accommodate new infrastructures.
This
 means that there would be cutting of trees and clearing of agricultural land to facilitate in
puttung
hitting a golf ball that is on the green using a putter
putting
 up new buildings.
Hence
, with these conditions,
this
 may cause pollution and can give a negative impact to the environment and institutions.
However
, change is inevitable. Most people from large companies vouch or is open for
change especially
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change, especially
 if it helps in the society for new opportunities. For the community, they would no longer travel to far places going to the city
centers
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
.
Also
, individuals would be able to attend or finish their tasks on time with less hassle.
Moreover
, big companies will provide work opportunities to people who are unemployed in provinces like realty corporations.
For instance
, a real estate company planned to put up low-cost housing located in Callawa, Davao City, a suburb town away from the city with limited facilities. In order to achieve
this
, the company will be in need of manpower and employees.
Therefore
,
this
 would give residents in
provinces job
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provinces, job
province job
province province job
 offers, a place to live in and facilities that are within reach.
In addition
, another advantage is that it can lessen traffic congestion
to
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in
 urban cities. In brief, the benefits definitely outweigh the disadvantages. Despite its cost and danger to the environment, having
such
 notion will bring more access and less hassle, employment and projects for improvements to the society.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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