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Many people work from homeusing modern technology today. Some people think that only the workers benefit from this not the employers. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #work #technology #workers #benefit #employers
In
this
 globalized world, technology has changed the complete scenario of the
wrokers
a person who works at a specific occupation
workers
 in
company
Suggestion
the company
a company
, in
this
 21st century, Information
technology
the practical application of science to commerce or industry
Technology
 has
shoke
Suggestion
shaken
shook
shocked
shock
 the world with its growing opportunities to public and most of the workers around the world
work
 for IT companies, to make workers more
comfartable
providing or experiencing physical well-being or relief
comfortable
 the companies have introduced
new method
Suggestion
a new method
new methods
 that, workers can
work
 from
home
 with their gadgets
instead
 of going to
office
Suggestion
the office
,
Althogh
even though, in spite of the fact that
although
,
this
 method has made a clash between workers and
employes
a person or firm that employs workers
employers
.
To begin
,
work
 from
home
 is a benefit to workers in most of the cases, like, he can save the traveling time and utilize it in
work
, instaed of spending time in traffic,
this
 will reduce the traffic congetion in city and worker can
work
 from any location which is
comfartable
 for him even from remote places, In all the cases worker is benefited through
this
, well, some people say that employes are not benefitted throgh
this
, has i have seen my brother working in WIPRO, which is a IT company, through the companies website all employers and workers come to geather and
work
, their is no extra benefit for any of them, a manager will be guiding them while working hours, so that, no one can cheat the
work
. To continue,
their
in or at that place
there
 is a special website by company for workers and
employes
a worker who is hired to perform a job
employees
employers
 who
work
 from
home
, and a manager who leads the team to look at
wheather
introduces two alternatives
whether
weather
water
 everyone in
team
Suggestion
the team
a team
 are online while working hours or not,
this
 is
serious
Suggestion
a serious work issue
work
 issue to grow in their
carrer
the particular occupation for which you are trained
career
careers
, no one can get extra benefit, it is all about their individual performance to showcase, through my experience
were
In or at or to what place
where
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 have seen my brother working from
home
,
Accept space
,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 understood that,
its
it is
it's
comfartable
providing or experiencing physical well-being or relief
comfortable
 for
empoyes
a worker who is hired to perform a job
employees
 and workers without any partiality. To summarize,
work
 from
home
 is a good
oppurtunity
a possibility due to a favorable combination of circumstances
opportunity
opportunities
 for
employes
a person or firm that employs workers
employers
 and workers to save time and enjoy working in their
comfartable
providing or experiencing physical well-being or relief
comfortable
 places staying with
thier
of them or themselves
their
 parents, both of them
are equally benefitted
Suggestion
equally benefit
 of
this
 method, I will disagree with the statement that only workers are
benefitted
Suggestion
benefiting
 of
it
it is
it's
 not the
employes
a worker who is hired to perform a job
employees
employers
employee
,
judgeing
the cognitive process of reaching a decision or drawing conclusions
judging
 it by my brother's
work
.

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