It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children?

It is crucial to raise a child into a good individual in the society. It is common believe that employing a
punishment
is the best way to establish a good
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
and maintaining discipline in children. I completely agree with
this
idea. Parents while punishing must be careful as excess or wrong
punishment
will lead to negative impact on child’s personality or mental and physical health. They should avoid scolding and smacking children. Many people suggest it is enough to establish a
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
in a child to distinguish between right and
wrong whereas
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wrong, whereas
kids are not enough mature to understand
this
distinction and they
do
engage in
make
mistakes intentionally or sometimes unintentionally. If they do not get any feedback they tend to make
same mistakes
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the same mistakes
next
time. Penalizing them avoids
doing
the act that results in something coming to be
making
the same mistake again and whenever any bad intentions come to their
mind their
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mind, their
body will reflexively remind them of past response for similar action.
For
instance if
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instance, if
a kid
make
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makes
a drawing on
wall
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the wall
walls
a wall
, asking them to clean the wall as a little recompense will make them realize
this
is not
right place
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the right place
a right place
to draw.
Therefore
punishment
will be a part of teaching children to be better. Now the question is what kinds of
punishment
is useful or acceptable and whether it should be in
form
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the form
of physical or verbal? Researchers believe these both must be a very
last
option for
any
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some
parents to opt. A study published by Institute of clinical psychology, University of Karachi state that wrong and excess retribution
mark
engage in
make
a negative impression on
kid’s mind
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a kid’s mind
which leads to mental distress and suppression of positive attributes in
child
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children
the child
a child
. Referring the above example of wall drawing if the kid was scolded or smacked, chances are he might
took
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take
drawing as a wrong act and stop drawing. For
this
reason parents
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reason, parents
must act wisely in opting response to teach them a positive lesson. To sum up
punishment
is an essential part of upbringing of youngsters it will improve the discipline and help them to distinguish between right and wrong provided that parents applied it sensibly and judiciously.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • punishment
  • positive reinforcement
  • consequences
  • time-outs
  • removal of privileges
  • open communication
  • clear expectations
  • consistency
  • fairness
  • disciplinary action
  • proportionate
  • moral values
  • internalization
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