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Some people think that developed countries have a higher responsibility to combat climate change than developing countries. Others believe that all countries should have the same responsibilities towards protecting the environment. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is commonly held belief that the
environment
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is continually facing
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is continually faced
 with a wide range of issues. While there is an argument that people who live in a developed place are the causes of the damage and should
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 protect more the
environment
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, others believe that developing countries should
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 support them. My view is that not only industrialised countries should protect the
planet
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, but
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 everyone in
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 world. There are several reasons why industrialised areas are the main causes of the damaged
planet
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 and should
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 eliminate the issue. While underdeveloped countries have fewer cars and
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 less pollution, other places, especially in big cities exist many cars which are driven around, exposing air pollution.
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, the densely populated areas
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 as China are building numerous factories where chemical sources are used and exacerbate the
environment
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 seriously. In
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 case, these people are responsible for fighting against the pollution.
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, help from other places does
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 bring significant benefits. Even though the effects of climate change and other severe problems are found mainly in overpopulated countries, developing countries may
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 cause some issues. Take an example of small places
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on
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planet
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 which are quite less crowded and have
few cars
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a few cars
, but if each person in these areas
drive
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drives
 every day
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in
 the car and use useless plastic bags, it affects the
environment
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 too in the long run. To conclude, it is claimed that only big cities are the ones who should save the
planet
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, but in my opinion, everyone which includes the developing countries, needs to reduce the use of cars and plastic bags as they are the particular reason of the destroyed
planet
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.
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, use public transport and renewable bags.

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