The graph shows the percentage of male and female academic staff members across the faculties of a major university in 2012 summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph elucidates the proportion of male and female academic
staff
members
across the faculties of a major university in 2012.
Fundamentally, there is a conspicuous number
in faculty
of engineering for Correct article usage
the faculty
male
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males
total
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the total
number
81
%. Meanwhile, Change preposition
of 81
faculty
of business Correct article usage
the faculty
have
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has
total
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a total
number
62
% for Change preposition
of 62
male
. The lowest Fix the agreement mistake
males
number
of male academic staff
members
are
only 21% in Correct subject-verb agreement
is
faculty
of Correct article usage
the faculty
education
.
Afterwards, there is a noticeable number
of female
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females
faculty
of Correct article usage
the faculty
education
are
65%. Unnecessary verb
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, there are
45% Change the verb form
is
number of
female academic Correct quantifier usage
apply
staff
members
in faculty
of arts. In spite Correct article usage
the faculty
of
, there Correct pronoun usage
thisof
are
only 18% Change the verb form
is
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of female
female
in Fix the agreement mistake
females
faculty
of engineering.
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the faculty
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, there is a Add an article
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contrast
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number
of female and male academic staff
members
. Men have highest
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the highest
number
in faculty
of Correct article usage
the faculty
education
with total
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the total
number
81
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of 81
therefore
women are only have
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only have
18
% total Correct article usage
an 18
number
. Depending on female
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Females
65
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a 65
number
in faculty
of Correct article usage
the faculty
education
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