comparison of the sports centre now and after redevelopment

The plan illustrates the layout of
university sports
Suggestion
the university sports centre
centre
now and after the development of the
centre
. The current sports
centre
has limited amenities like gym, small 25m swimming
pool
and seating area. There is a big outdoor court on both the side of the sports
centre
for playing outdoor games. The
future
university sports
centre
after the redevelopment is enlarged and has various amenities. The gym area has been increased in the
future
plans.
Similarly
, there are new dance studios which
has been added
Suggestion
have been added
in the plans which are not available in the current sports
centre
.
There has been addition
Suggestion
There has been an addition
There has been added
There has been added added
of
coffee shop
Suggestion
coffee shops
a coffee shop
the coffee shop
and sports shop
inside
Suggestion
in
the sports
centre
which will help students purchase any sports item
.
Accept space
.
Currently there is only
one
changing
room but
Accept comma addition
room, but
as
Suggestion
at
the per the
future
plans there are 3 changing rooms at different areas of the
centre
. The current area of outdoor courts will be utilised for building a leisure
pool
for students. There is a changing
room
immediately
next
to the leisure
pool
.
Similarly
, there is
addition
Suggestion
the addition
an addition
of
one
changing
room
next
to the 25 m
pool
and the gym so
crowd
Suggestion
the crowd
will be spread out
instead
of going to
one
common changing
room
.
Lastly there
Accept comma addition
Lastly, there
is an addition
of
Suggestion
to
sports hall where students can play basketball, badminton or any other outdoor sports which looks better than the current
one
. To summarise all, the
future
redevelopment of the
centre
looks more organised than the current
one
and has more amenities than the current
one
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