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comparison of the sports centre now and after redevelopment

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The plan illustrates the layout of
university sports
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the university sports centre
centre
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 now and after the development of the
centre
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. The current sports
centre
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 has limited amenities like gym, small 25m swimming
pool
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 and seating area. There is a big outdoor court on both the side of the sports
centre
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 for playing outdoor games. The
future
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 university sports
centre
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 after the redevelopment is enlarged and has various amenities. The gym area has been increased in the
future
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 plans.
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, there are new dance studios which
has been added
Suggestion
have been added
 in the plans which are not available in the current sports
centre
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.
There has been addition
Suggestion
There has been an addition
There has been added
There has been added added
 of
coffee shop
Suggestion
coffee shops
a coffee shop
the coffee shop
 and sports shop
inside
Suggestion
in
 the sports
centre
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 which will help students purchase any sports item
.
Accept space
.
Currently there is only
one
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 changing
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room but
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room, but
as
Suggestion
at
 the per the
future
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 plans there are 3 changing rooms at different areas of the
centre
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. The current area of outdoor courts will be utilised for building a leisure
pool
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 for students. There is a changing
room
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 immediately
next
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 to the leisure
pool
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.
Similarly
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, there is
addition
Suggestion
the addition
an addition
 of
one
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 changing
room
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next
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 to the 25 m
pool
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 and the gym so
crowd
Suggestion
the crowd
 will be spread out
instead
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 of going to
one
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 common changing
room
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.
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Lastly there
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Lastly, there
 is an addition
of
Suggestion
to
 sports hall where students can play basketball, badminton or any other outdoor sports which looks better than the current
one
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. To summarise all, the
future
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 redevelopment of the
centre
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 looks more organised than the current
one
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 and has more amenities than the current
one
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