IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 5

Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #reason #language #travel #work #country #someone
In recent years, More and more people argued that we should study a foreign
language
 if we want to go aboard,
otherwise
 we should not. Others maintained that we should learn a foreign
language whether
Accept comma addition
language, whether
 people went aboard or stayed at home.
First
 of all, if we
traveled
traveled over or through; sometimes used as a combining term
travelled
 to or worked in a foreign country, speaking a foreign
language
 was unavoidable,
however if
Accept comma addition
however, if
 just only stayed at home, people say that learning a foreign
language
 was time-consuming and useless, so we should not focus on learning a foreign
language
, meanwhile, It meant that you had more spare time to study other knowledges than others.
For example
, in china most people who did not go aboard and know foreign languages has a good life either, and some successful businessman did not learn a foreign
language
,
if they wanted go
Suggestion
if they wanted to go
 aboard, they would take a translator.
On the other hand
, others criticized that learning a foreign
language
 was not only in order to travel or work.
Afterall
Suggestion
After all
, if you familiar with a foreign
language
, you were able to read some foreign article, it would enlarge your visions. Most people who have known a foreign
language
 would have a good
understand
Suggestion
understanding
 for
world
Suggestion
the world
 and made business more successful.
For example
, in developed country some executives of big company always were bilingual, which could make them exchange their
idea
Suggestion
ideas
 to
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
 foreigner directly. To sum up, I mentioned that learning a foreign
language
 could take lots of benefits, not only for going aboard, but
also
 understanding
this
 world better. I read an article about being a bilingual, it said that your brain could deal with complex question more efficiency, if you were bilingual. At
last
, with the development of times, I believe that learning a foreign
language
 like English is unavoidable.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Topic Vocabulary:
  • multilingual
  • linguistic proficiency
  • globalized world
  • cross-cultural communication
  • immersive experience
  • adaptability
  • cultural exchange
  • interpersonal skills
  • employment prospects
  • empathy
  • intellectual development
  • overcome language barriers
  • global market
  • resourceful
  • life-changing
What to do next:
Look at other essays: