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You live near a university and would like to earn some extra money by renting a room in your apartment to a student. Write a letter to the university housing office.

#university #money #room #apartment #student #office
I want to let you know of an apartment opportunity I have for
university
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a university
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 student. I am a resident of the university neighbourhood. I have an extra apartment
that is
 available for rent. My name is Enakpotobo Lucky and I have lived in
this
 neighbourhood for about ten years. I worked with the Delta State Board of Internal Revenue as a Tax clerk.
Furthermore
, my apartment is the perfect place for an undergraduate. It is five blocks away from the university, so any schoolchild that will rent the space would not have to pay bus fare before going to receive lectures.
Also
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 the environment is peaceful and assured of
security
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the security
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 of life and properties. The place available for rent is cosy which would be suitable for any student. It has kitchen utensils and furniture which is
also
 included in the rental fee. I am ready to show the room to anyone who will indicate interest. Perhaps, you can have them call me
through
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this
 number 23466788910. Thanks for your help. Yours sincerely Enakpotobo Lucky

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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