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A person's worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honor, kindness and trust, no longer seem important. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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In
modern era
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the modern era
, people believe that social
status
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 and material
possionns
the act of having and controlling property
possessions
potions
portions
 are the best parameters to
judge
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 the people's value. Those people have luxurious cars, expensive outfits, big houses, high work profile are more worthy as compared to that who are merely kind, trustworthy as well as honest. So, I consider that it is not the right way to predict any individual. I will discuss my views in the upcoming paragraphs. To commence with, in today's world people are having more stress and work as compared to the previous generations.
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 why, they want to relax by becoming rich and want to live a wealthy life because they feel that it will bring more respect and social
status
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 from people. Everybody
think
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thinks
 that show-off is a fashionable trend, if people have expensive
car
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car, then
then
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 they drive so that the time, people
judge
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to
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for
of
 them with their value of high profile.
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, which
person
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 has high
status
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, these things make them more important in other's because good outfit, job security and their
appreance
outward or visible aspect of a person or thing
appearance
 show them more worthy.
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, CEO of the company has more respect as compared to the experienced
person
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 in the same organisation. People consider that
richhness
the property of being extremely abundant
richness
 makes a
person
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 attractive. It is sad to say that because we are setting up the wrong parameters to
judge
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 a
person
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. These things die our ethical values as well as traditional thinking. The rich, royal people are not always good at heart. They do not care for others and are self-
centered
being or placed in the center
centred
. There are many cases which
proves
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prove
 that these people are arrogant
adn
in order to; used instead of "to", especially after try, come, go
and
 egoistic in their behaviour and
approch
move towards
approach
approaches
 towards others. They forget that
this
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 society is a group of people from different financial statuses, living together with love and care. Human is a social animal, so the society must have good ethical values, nobody should be allowed to disrespect others in any way. In a nutshell, many people think that social
status
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 and property are the best ways to
judge
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 a
person
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 but in real people must be judged by their moral and traditional values.

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