It is generally accepted that families are not as close as they used to be Give some reasons why this change has happened and suggest how families could be brought closer together Include any relevant example from your experience

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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275 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

family interactions
technological advancements
virtual interactions
dual-income households
urbanization
migration
social structures
individualism
family cohesiveness
belonging
open communication
emotional support
shared activities
family dynamics
work-life balance
family traditions
regular gatherings
counseling
family therapy
prioritizing family time

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