It is generally accepted that families are not as close as they used to be Give some reasons why this change has happened and suggest how families could be brought closer together Include any relevant example from your experience

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not emotionally attached.
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dramatic change in society has many resons.
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Firstly
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a huge lack
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have started
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advises from outsiders and their tendancy
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an attitude of mind especially one that favors one alternative over others
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own people is becoming more like strangers.
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have started
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ften seen families where parents sacrifie
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n quality education, hobbies instruments and pocket money.But all these things are overlooked by children.
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can overcome these issues? Spending holidays and weekends is good option people works fa
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are working
m home.Elders should try to increase emotional attachment and create selfless environment that make family members feel blessed to have
such
family.Children should be tought i
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ly and how family support them to survive emotionally as well as financially since childhood. I remember a friend of my father was doing PhD in P
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ent in India fell ill and needed him.Without hesitation, he resigned his job and came back to India with his two children and wife . Today
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