The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004.
The line chart demonstrates the usage of fish and various types of meat from 1979 until 2004 in a European country.
In general,beef meat was the most
consumptional
food in 1979,followed by chicken and lamb.Fish,Correct your spelling
consumption
however
,wasn't consumed like them.
When looked Linking Words
in
detail,consumption of beef and lamb Change preposition
at in
drammatically
went down almost twice from 1979 to 2004.Correct your spelling
dramatically
In
the contrary,Change the preposition
On
line
Correct article usage
the line
which
shows Correct pronoun usage
apply
the
chicken usage approximately increased from 150 grams per person per week to 250 grams.Correct your spelling
that
Consuming
Replace the word
Consumption
of
fish,Change preposition
apply
however
,wasn't change significantly.It's Linking Words
around
50 grams since 1979.Add a missing verb
been around
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