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Some people think that professional athletes make good role models for young people, while others believe they don’t. What is your opinion on that?

#people #athletes #role #models #don’t
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Each person has one or many
role
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 models in his or her
life
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. They prefer to imitate style, method of
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 and skills from their
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 models. Professional athletes are
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 good
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 models for the people who prefer to watch sports or engage in similar sports activity. People, who have good athletic skills, showcase their talents. They will accept both success and failure in the same manner.
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 is a very good lesson learnt from professional athletes. People who think athletes as their
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 model, they will try to imitate that behaviour in their
life
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. Athletes are playing a major
r
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ole in influencing in
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role in influencing
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ther’s
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the other’s life
other’s lives
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. The example of attending t
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practices
 time management, continuous practice, self-confidence and m
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more behaviours are learnt by many y
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a scheming person; someone who schemes to gain an advantage
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 is influencing in both male and female youngsters. At the same time, professional athletes are not the only group of people act as good
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 models. Good artists, good social workers, teachers, medical staff, government servants
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 act as good
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 models in y
oungers’
used of the younger of two persons of the same name especially used to distinguish a son from his father
younger
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. According to the preferences of y
oungers,
used of the younger of two persons of the same name especially used to distinguish a son from his father
younger
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 models
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 differ.
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the Youngers
like to watch more films than sports,
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, an actor or actress would be a
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 model for them. If they prefer to involve in social service, previous leaders o
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social service would be their
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 models, examples of Mother Theresa.
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,
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 models are not only from the field of athletes but
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 from vast numbers of other fields. Anyhow, as per my own opinion, I agree with the statement, ‘some people think that professional athletes make good
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 models for young people while other fields of professionals
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 make good
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 models for young people
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