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The line graph displays information on the number of armed robberies, assaults, and murders committed in London from 2003 until 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The line graph displays information on the number of armed robberies, assaults, and murders committed in London from 2003 until 2010. Overall, the number of armed robberies recorded the most committed crimes until 2006, and
then
 dramatically decreased, while assault figures significantly increased. The murder remained relatively stable over the entire period. The number of armed thefts increased from just under 3,500 in 2003 to around 3,700 in 2004.
This
 is the largest committed crimes until 2006 to just above 2,500, before it experienced a decline to the lowest, in 2006 to just over 1,000. A slight increase to just below 1,500 in 2009, which remained relatively stable until 2012. The assault transpired cases around 2,300 in 2003. The following year 2004 until 2009, it fluctuated within the range of 2,000 and just below 2,500. A noticeable increase in 2010 to just over 2,500 and
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around 2,700 in 2012.
Moreover
, murder cases remained relatively stable in the range of 500 and just below 1,000 throughout the given period 2003 until 2012.
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