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Should the same laws which prohibit the sale and consumption of heroin be applied to tobacco? Discuss.

#laws #sale #consumption #heroin #tobacco
Recently, a heated debate
arouse
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arouses
 when a few reputable health organizations suggested the application of a similar act of heroin selling and usage prohibition _. In
this
assay
an analytic or interpretive literary composition
essay
, I will
analyze
consider in detail and subject to an analysis in order to discover essential features or meaning
analyse
 why the adoption of
such
 a law could be a breakthrough in our youngsters’ safety, according to my vision.
Firstly
, tobacco does not differ much from heroin when it comes to the addictive effect.
Nicotin
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Nicotine
,
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,
 the active ingredient in tobacco, exerts its effect by acting directly on smoker’s brain cells. Numerous experiments carried out by scientist on animals,
specailly
to a distinctly greater extent or degree than is common
especially
 rats, proved that
this
 toxic chemical does lead
by
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with
 time to dependency, just
similarly
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similar
 to the effect experienced with
herion
(law) a proceeding (usually by a court) where evidence is taken for the purpose of determining an issue of fact and reaching a decision based on that evidence
hearing
.
Secondly
, the restriction on
cigerattes
finely ground tobacco wrapped in paper; for smoking
cigarettes
cigarette
 selling would surely show an instant decline in tobacco smoking. ” Having easy access to cigarettes puts a tremendous pressure, especially
on
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in
with
 teenagers
,
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,
to resist
such
 a temptation” Dr.Hisham
,
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,
 head of
Pschycology
the science of mental life
psychology
 department at Alexandria Medical college
,
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,
 states firmly. “Giving the new generation the sense that the severity of smoking is
equivilant
a person or thing equal to another in value or measure or force or effect or significance etc
equivalent
 to other lethal drugs usage
woulod
past tense of "will"
would
 be a life saving step, they will thank us for as they get older.”
he
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He
 continues. To recapitulate, applying of a futuristic
law
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law, such
such
 as the suggested one will
definetly
without question and beyond doubt
definitely
 have a positive impact
,
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,
not only
on
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for
 young people’s health but on our society as a whole.

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