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some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortages of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #situation #job #shortages #money #situations
It is considered by some people think that being unhappy
in
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with
 job and having less
money
 is
great way
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a great way
 to accept the bad situations. While others assert it is best way to learn and resolve that
situations
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situation
. In my opinion people never give up in those
situations but
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situations, but
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 will discuss both views. There are plethora reasons why the people think to accept the bad situations because of lacking confidence, ability, easily give up,
demotivation
 and compare with others. I saw many people suffer from these issues they think having less
money
 and undesirable job is our destiny we cannot change it. From their past
experience their
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experience, their
 mind was fixed they cannot change their mentality. These
type
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types
 of people never try
show
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to show
 their capabilities and efforts. In
high competitive world
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a highly competitive world
highly competitive world
, people try to improve their social status in the society. So they work hard in their professional life to achieve
desire
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desired
 status and promotion. They continually try different strategies for earning high income. If they not satisfied with their
job
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job, then
then
 they switched their jobs and try something different that will be interested
for
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in
 them.
However people
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However, people
 believe that nothing will be impossible if we are not happy with our jobs we can develop our own business to earn a lot of
money
 and not having any control of
boss
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a boss
the boss
. If we are
focused our
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focused, our
motives
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motives, then
then
 we can achieve anything for our family and children. In the conclusion, people try to improve their bad situation rather than accepted it. They need to change their mentality by switching jobs or try to something different
for
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from
earn
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earning
money
. Sometimes people have to take one step forward for their careers and family.

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