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The bar chart illustrates the proportions of Australian men to women of various
age
 groups who performed daily physical activity in 2010
.
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.
 Overall, there is a gradual
increase
 in physical activities of the women while compared to men. Women
has recorded
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have recorded
 the highest percentage in doing physical activities. There is a decline in the activities of the men
upto
 certain extent and later there is a gradual
increase
 in
graph
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the graph
. Women of all the
age
 groups are consistent and maintained activity rate above 42. Women
belongs
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belong
 to the
age
group
 45-54 have recorded the highest percentage of 53.3%. From
age
group
 15 to 54 there is a gradual
increase
 in the
graph
 of
women but
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women, but
 later there is some declining
graph
 after 54.
Initially
 men
at
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in
 the
age
group
 15-24 are very actively participating in these activities than women.
Furthermore there
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Furthermore, there
 is a decline in the
graph
at
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of
 the
age
group
 of 35-44
upto
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option
 39.5% percent. After the
age
 of 44 there is a partial
increase
 in the percentage of people involved in the physical activities.
Finally
, after 65 both men and women are equally
participated
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participating
 and involved in doing physical activities with 46.7 and 47.1 respectively.

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