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Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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Advertisement these days are a means of promotion of objects and is a necessity. While some people believe that
such
 displays give us valuable information about new products others think it makes us wish for things we don't really need. I believe advertisements have made our life a lot easier and I will give some examples from my personal experience. With the advancement in technology so many brands of phones
are
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is
 available in the market. Every day a new feature is launched in the market. When I thought of buying a new phone, I was in distress about how to proceed. But
then
 the advertisements helped me making a choice. We can find
comparison
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a comparison
the comparison
 between the features available and price. It helped me in taking
a
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an
 informed decision. Advertisements have become the necessity not only for the
seller but
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seller, but
also
 for the buyer. Surprisingly without them we cannot pass information about products between maker and user.
For
example before
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example, before
 visiting the sea beach I wanted to buy a
suncream but
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sunscreen, but
sunscreen but
 I was confused which one to buy when the various ads in the television explained the difference between the products. Now a
days
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day
 in television, movie halls
,
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,
 road side everywhere advertisements are displayed and they are doing their part in providing data about items. To conclude advertising an item reduces our effort in understanding the availability of items in
market
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the market
. It is a good thing and is required.

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