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The first car appeared on British roads in 1888. By the year 2000 there may be as many as 29 million vehicles on British roads. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged and international laws introduced to control car ownership and use. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Pollution
 is the main problem or leading cause of different diseases specially respiratory disease.
This
 should be
control
Suggestion
controlled
 to avoid global warming and
pollution
. The cause of
this
 type of
pollution
 is combustion of gasses from vehicles. There are so many types of vehicles introduce every year which
attract
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attracts
 people towards
itself but
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itself, but
 there is not any good improvement to control
this
pollution
.
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.
 There are so many diseases related to
this
environment increasing
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environment, increasing
 day by day
.
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.
 If
not control
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not, control
 it would be the leading cause of death in comping years. One of the main disease is COPD (chronic obstructive pulmonary disease) the patients of
this
 group are short of oxygen and cannot breath well and if expose to
such
pollution
 there will be death for sure. Alternative forms of transport should be encouraged like for short distance places one should use
bicycle
Suggestion
bicycles
instead
 of car of motorbike. In some developed countries the alternative to these petrol and gas vehicle they have
electrical
Suggestion
electric
 vehicles which are
eco
Suggestion
Eco
 friendly as compared to that of petrol and gas which produce
pollution
 in
environment
Suggestion
the environment
.
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.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • reliance on
  • regulate
  • traffic congestion
  • pollution
  • public health
  • sustainable development
  • alternative forms of transport
  • car ownership
  • balancing benefits and drawbacks
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