The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eating too much. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts compare the average proportions of three unhealthy nutrients, namely
sodium
, saturated fat and added sugar, in typical meals consumed by American people.
Overall
, while
the majority of sodium
and saturated fats are consumed in the dinner meal, added sugars are mostly eaten in Add an article
a snack
the snack
snack
. (wrong form) Fix the agreement mistake
snacks
In addition
, breakfast is by far the healthiest meal of during
the day.
The average percentages of Change preposition
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sodium
and saturated fats consumption in the dinner meal are the highest, (43% and 37% respectively). Both are That is
followed by those of lunch, with 29% for sodium
and 26% for saturated fat. However
, there are is
just 23% of Unnecessary verb
apply
add
sugar consumed through eating at dinner and nearly one-fifth Change the form of the verb
added
at
through eating lunch.
In terms of Breakfast contains more or less around 15% of those nutrients. is eaten during it. Regarding snacks, Change preposition
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its
average percentage Change the word
the
for
added sugar constitutes up to 42%, Change preposition
of
while
those for sodium
and saturated fat are barely 14% and 21% accordingly
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