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In many countries today, people in cities either live alone or in small family units, rather than in large, extended family groups. Is this a positive or negative trend?

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Introduction
Cities are seeing a rise in one-person households or with one or two
member
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members
 together to be a family, while large family, which are common in the past, has gradually been split these years. I believed that it's a negative development.
Body paragraph 1
As
family
Suggestion
the family
become
Suggestion
becomes
 smaller, the traditional family support network breaks down. It's not good for children to grow up and parents normally need to pay more for childcare. Children who need to
spent
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spend
 time with themselves have to use
televison
broadcasting visual images of stationary or moving objects
television
 or
internet
Suggestion
the internet
 as their only friend
thus
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 become much less
talkactive
full of trivial conversation
talkative
 and anti-social.
As a result
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,
gurdians
Suggestion
a guardian
guardian
the guardian
gardeners
guardians
 may find it more difficult to communicate with their pupil. It is no surprise that the decline of the extended family has been linked to a rise in psychological and behavioural problems amongst young people.
Body paragraph 2
The trend towards people living alone is perhaps even damaging because of the psychological effect of reduced human interaction. Individuals who live alone cannot find someone to talk and share their daily life or problem. Under
this
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 circumstance, which means no real interaction with others, boredom and loneliness may be exaggerated and eventually getting mental illness. It is reported that the reason of suicide in Tokyo may
related
Suggestion
relate
 to
alienatic
arouse hostility or indifference in where there had formerly been love, affection, or friendliness
alienate
 and isolated
at
Suggestion
in
as
on
 a single-living home.
Conclusion
In conclusion,
this
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 trend brings many side effects, and not only should we consider the development of a city, but
also
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 the mental health
for
Suggestion
of
 every human.

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