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The diagrams below show the design for a wave-energy machine and its location. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show the design for a wave-energy machine and its location. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pictures illustrate of design of
wave-energy
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the wave-energy
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machine
 and where it is located.
Firstly
, a
waves
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wave
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movement
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of movement
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coming
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comes
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 to the
machine
 and fills up inside it. After
water
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the water
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 levels
rises
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rise
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 up to the top of
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the chamber
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chamber
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chamber's
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 lower
side
,
then
 it will
produced
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produce
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an
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apply
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air. The air flows from under
side
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the side
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 of
chambers
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the chambers
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 and rotates the lower turbine. For
upper
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the upper
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 turbine, it is rotated by the air that comes in from
above
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the above
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chamber
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the chamber
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side
.
Next
, after
all
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,all
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 turbines rotate, it will
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result
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resulted
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inresulted
fromresulted
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 energy which
convert
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converts
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 to become electricity
power
 inside
in
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an
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 electricity generator.
Furthermore
, the location of
wave-energy
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the wave-energy
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machine
 is determined by
waves
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wave
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power
 that
coming
Wrong verb form
comes
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 inside to lower
side
 of
chamber
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the chamber
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. If
further
 the
machine
located
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is located
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 from the coastline,
then
 more
power
produced
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is produced
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as well
as
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a
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higher
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a higher
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 cost
needed
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is needed
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 to construct the
machine
.
Otherwise
, if
nearer
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apply
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the
machine
located
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is located
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from
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near
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 the coastline, that will make
cheaper
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it cheaper
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 to build even though electricity
power
 would
smaller
Add a missing verb
be smaller
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 to produce.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words machine, side, power with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "waves" was used 2 times.
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