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Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Medical and
health
care
 systems play
such
 an important role in every country people’s life’s and it’s
also
 one of the key features of that countries development ranking. It is expected that all nations should provide free
health
services
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services, although
although
 it may not be the most up to dated procedure and treatments due to its high price and expensiveness.
This
 essay will discuss why all nations should give free
health
 services in any quality available despite the high
cost
 of it. Governments always claim that they have provided a decent
health
care
 system through their insurance policies. These policies are designed to cover the most common
health
 issues which do not require a heavy budget. As an example, in my country, if you need to cover some sophisticated diseases, you have to pay the extra money and get
supplementary
Suggestion
supplemental
 insurance. These issues make people worried about their future and make them feel that their
health
 services are unreliable. Despite the wrong policies that governments follow on their
health
 programs, the idea of a complete and free of
cost
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costly
 medical
care
 system
not
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isn't also affecting
also
 affects the
societies
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society's
health
 quality, but it
also
 pays off in many different ways for the nation. When people are healthy, they work more proficiently and there will be stronger economics. As a record, if an employer takes
care
 of his employee's
health
 conditions, it will surely
cost
 less for him to replace him and train
another
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
 professional in the long term.
This
 essay argued that countries should provide free
health
care
 and medical services freely to its citizens due to the high
cost
 of it. In my opinion, expending on society's
health
 system not only costs
less but
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less, but
 it will pay off in the long term despite its quality and the technology and
also
 governments should invest more in people’s
health
.

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