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You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter: explain why you want to work in the company’s head office for six months say how your work could be done while you are away ask for his/her help in arranging it

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Dear Mr Siva, I am writing to express my thoughts
in
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 working at our company headquarters in Canada for a few months to
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 the Canadian products of our organization so that I can better contribute to my firm and carry out my responsibilities more efficiently.
Also
, I will get a plethora of international knowledge which will put me one step ahead of all other Indian employees.
Also
, I assure you that, I will contribute more to the team as I come back to India. As you know, I have been recently promoted to the Technical product architect post and I am working hard to collaborate with my team to enhance the product architecture and increase our brand reputation by supporting multi-tenant applications and software.
However
, I have been feeling the need to meet and collaborate with our global team members and attend software architecture training sessions that our head workplace in Canada arranges every week. I am quite positive that the opportunity to endeavour in our company’s head office for six months or more will
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exposure to the
world-wide
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task-force
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. I have spoken to Sudhakar and he has agreed to take up my responsibilities during my absence;
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 it will be just one day, as I will be travelling on weekends only.
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, I will check my emails hourly, and be available for emergency phone calls over Skype. Once I get back to the office, I would strive to work extra hours in order to catch up on anything I had missed.
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, I would need your support to get approval and for
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 of mine so that I can work in our company’s head office for six months or more and fulfil the objectives. I look forward to your positive reply. Yours sincerely,
Sumant
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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professional development
  • global operations
  • cross-functional
  • remote work
  • progress updates
  • logistical arrangements
  • cultural exchange
  • continuity plan
  • enhance my skillset
  • broaden my horizons
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