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Write about the following topic: In many countries it is now illegal to smoke in public places. It is only fair that people who wish to smoke should have to leave the building. Do you agree or disagree? Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#topic #countries #smoke #places #people #reason
Recently, most nations have banned smoking in public areas.
Although
 smoking
is harmful to health and smokers are
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is harmful to health and smokers
has harmful to health and smokers been
is harmful to health and smokers being
is harmful to health and smokers are
 liable to die young, it is still their right to express themselves. In my opinion,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 think it is fair to put up laws restricting smokers on where they can
smoke
 rather than
ouright ban
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an outright ban
outright ban
outright bans
right ban
.
Firstly
, cigarettes
is
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are
 beneficial to health. It contains
nicotine which
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nicotine, which
 is said to have significant relaxing effects. Studies have shown that
individuals depressed
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individuals, depressed
 or stressed feel more
relaxaed
without strain or anxiety
relaxed
 after one or two sticks of cigarette.
Secondly
, smoking enhances an individual's understanding and assimilation during studying. A comparative study conducted among a group of university students who
smoke
 before reading and those who do not
smoke
 before studying showed an improved performance among the students that
smoke
.
On the contrary
, the restriction will protect
non smokers
a person who does not smoke tobacco
nonsmokers
 from the hazards of smoking. It is said that non smokers smokes twice while inhaling the puffs of a smoker and the effects on health is more. The effects
is
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are
 even more on
immunocompromised
 individuals. Studies have shown that non smokers that stay with smokers are two times more at risk of respiratory diseases. In conclusion,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 do believe that cigarette smoking is not an illegal substance and restricting individuals to clearly identified smoking areas
by
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of
 law is a better way to protect
non smokers
a person who does not smoke tobacco
nonsmokers
 from the
harzards
a source of danger; a possibility of incurring loss or misfortune
hazards
 of smoking.
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