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International tourism has brought enormous benefits to many places. At the same time, there is concern about its impact on local inhabitants and the environment. Do the disadvantages of international tourism outweigh the advantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Toursim
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Tourism
 has
an
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a
 greater impact on
countries'
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the countries' economy
economy
. Travelling to other places on vacation always helps to increase the financial state of travelling nation, even though always
their
in or at that place
there
 is
an
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a
 worry on residents and their
teritory
a region marked off for administrative or other purposes
territory
 because of the increasing travellers to their habitat.
Although
 vocational visitor to the countries
always stablize
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always stabilizes
always stabilize
 or
elivate
provide physical relief, as from pain
alleviate
 the poverty, which always makes
country
 famous regardless of few changes seen in inhabitant population and
geographically
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geography
. In my opinion, tourism
benifits
financial assistance in time of need
benefits
 more than than the affect showing on
public
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the public
 and their nature will be discussed in the essay. Aboard tourism plays a vital role in
expand
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expanding
 the countries'
economy
. As more visitor coming to a
country
 always increase the popularity as well as generate good revenue for the nation, which can used for nations own growth and perpetuate. Recent articles
has shown
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have shown
 that how
dubai's
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Dubai's
economy
 rate has expanded over the period of time because of
toursim
the business of providing services to tourists
tourism
,
also
 on other hand
havard
be undecided about something; waver between conflicting positions or courses of action
hovered
 research
studies says
Accept comma addition
studies, says
 that most of the low level countries has nourished their poverty by attracting
toursim
the business of providing services to tourists
tourism
. These ultra-challenging invention increase the value and make the
country
 famous over other nations by elevating their
economy
. On Other hand, every action has
an
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a
 dual effect like one for good and another for bad.
Likewise
, increasing journeyer will have a minimal
affect
a phenomenon that follows and is caused by some previous phenomenon
effect
 on dwellers and their
culture
, whereas public
always get
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always gets
 attracted towards their body language, dressing and
also
 their fast paced
culture
. Which always hamper their
trational
consisting of or derived from tradition
traditional
 ways
where in
(formal) where, in what respect
wherein
 they are used to form longer time.
Recent survey
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A recent survey
 shows that, residents like to adapt to new
culture
 like dressing or the way they carry them from voyager, which change their natural way and could change the
culture
 of the native society.
Increased popularity
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The increased popularity
 of any nation can be done by means of
toursim
the business of providing services to tourists
tourism
, which brings a great money. In
this
 essay I have discussed about the benefits of
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the business of providing services to tourists
tourism
 by increasing
econmy
the system of production and distribution and consumption
economy
economies
 of a
provinence
 with contrast to changing in the life style of
habitant
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the habitant
 and geographically due increasing tourist. I strongly
belive
accept as true; take to be true
believe
believes
believed
 that attracting other nations by tourism always help the
country
 to grow can outweigh the changes in locals could happen because of
they
objective case of they
them
 getting admired by dwellers life style, which is completely depends on
indiviual
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the individual
individual
 rather than blaming others.
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