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In m countryany places new homes are needed, but the only space available for building them is in the countryside. Some people believe it is more important to protect the countryside and not bulid new homes there. What is your opinion about this?

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A few masses opine that it is more important to protect the
countryside
 and not build new homes
there
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there, however
however
 only space available for building them is in the
countryside
. In
this
 essay will discuss the relevant views and
wil
the capability of conscious choice and decision and intention
will
 give
opinion
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an opinion
. Admittedly, building a new home is the necessity
for
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of
population
. To make the balance of basic needs in
city
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the city
cities
 we need to
develope
make something new, such as a product or a mental or artistic creation
develop
 the
countryside
 so that the load of
population
 and demand of food, transportation will be equally divided among all. If we started developing
countryside we
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countryside, we
 can create
a
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an
 opportunity to all people who can work not only in farming sector but
also
 in manufacturing and technology
sector which
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sector, which
 improves the education standard in
countryside
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the countryside
 and we will get the more resources in every
advacned
farther along in physical or mental development
advanced
 filed. Within the realm of society, without
the sloght
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the slightest
the slight
 doubt, on
other hand if
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the other hand, if
the other hand if
 we start developing
countryside it
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countryside, it
 will
effect
have an effect upon
affect
population
, infrastructure, transportation and pollution in
countryside
. As
countryside
 people are more focused on farming and have business which are related to farming sector may affect if we start constructing homes on
farmers
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farmers'
 land. It will impact their daily routine as they are not familiar with
life style
a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes
lifestyle
 change and might fail to adopt it. If
countryside
 starts developing and building a new homes the construction will cause
a
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an
 air pollution as well as water pollution and sudden import of labours cause increase in
population
 impact the balance of
countryside
 lifestyle. To put it in a nut shell. I pen
down saying
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down, saying
 that despite of
various benifits
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the various benefits
various benefits
 of building homes in the
countryside
 with a proper technology and advanced infrastructure we can
develope
make something new, such as a product or a mental or artistic creation
develop
 city without disturbing the
countryside
.

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