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Too much emphasis is placed on testing this days, the need to prepare for test and examination is a restriction on teachers and also exerts unnecessary pressure on young learners. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#emphasis #test #examination #restriction #teachers #pressure #learners
Education is not just going to
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 school or a university and getting a degree. In
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recent era, institutes
are
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 over
focussed
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 on
tests
, which leads to stress
in
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 the
children
as well as
 the educators who are always busy preparing and conducting the
exam
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. In
this
 essay, I advocate my agreement with
this
 statement.
Firstly
, the academies nowadays are putting unnecessary pressure on the
children
 by subjecting them to frequent
tests
 every now and
then
.
Secondly
, they include more
syllabus
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 which is almost a burden on the child's mind.
Then
,
children
 are left with less time to properly understand the concept and
as a
result
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 are more prone to cramming.
For Instance
, in a recent survey, conducted by the Delhi Education Department, it is observed that a growing number of failed students every year in Delhi is because of the overpressure created by the schools.
Furthermore
, the educators are
also
 under the constant pressure created by institute authorities. They are forced to complete the unrealistic curriculum within a stipulated amount of time,
as a result
, the guides nowadays are primarily focussing on completing the curricula rather than providing quality education to the
children
.
Then
, they are forced to do the preparation for the exam and
conducting
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exam
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the exam
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 every alternative month which results in diseases like Depression.
To conclude
,
although
,
tests
 are imperative to
access
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 the student's understanding of different course concepts,
but
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, organising more
tests
 within a short span of time can become
a stress
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 for both the coaches
as well as
 students and
government
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the government
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 should make sure that academies
should
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conduct
a
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less number of
tests
 and include less syllabus.
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