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International tourism has brought enormous benefits to many places. At the same time, there is concern about its impact on local inhabitants and the environment. Do the disadvantages of international tourism outweigh the advantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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The advancements in communications, technology, and
tourism
 have made the world become like a small village. Despite the benefits of the international
tourism
, it is growth had a negative impact on the local societies and their areas. In
this
 essay, I will explain why global
tourism
 advantages do not justify its downsides. On the one hand, the increase in the number of tourists has resulted in economic growth in the developing countries which welcome them,
therefore
, improving the life quality of the individuals.
For example
, Nepal has increased its number of tourists visiting it by the double in the
last
 five years, which was reflected in the country's average population income, which increased by 25%.
On the other hand
, the huge growth of
tourism
 has destroyed many of the traditional and original communities and their lifestyle.
For instance
, a recent study conducted by the University of London has shown that over 60% of people in Thailand have left their lands and agriculture and started working in the
tourism
 industry and moved to the cities.
Hence
, many of the villages are now almost empty.
In addition
 to that, many of the popular
tourism
 destinations do not force any laws to protect the environment, which might lead to an increase in the level of pollution and wastes,
hence
, harming the local animals and plants and downgrading the air quality. In conclusion, while
tourism
 has improved the life of people around the world, it
also
 has negative effects on the environment and local people especially in the
third
 world countries.
Therefore
, I believe
tourism
 industry should be regulated to insure its advantages exceed its downsides.
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