The chart and table below give information about population figures in Japan. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart and table below give information about population figures in Japan.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The given bar graph and table
provides
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provide
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the
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apply
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information on the past, present and future
population
of Japanese in the millions
along with
the percentage of 65 years or
over
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apply
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older persons
of
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in
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Japan between the year 1950 to 2055. It is clearly visible in
bar
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the bar
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graph that
Japan
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Japan's
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population
has increased since 1950
by
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from
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84.1 million to 127.8 million by 2005. From 2010 to 2015 the
population
was between 127.1 to 125 respectively. Perhaps, it will
going
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go
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to
be decrease
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be decreased
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in
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apply
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between 2035 to 2055 with 110 to 89.9 respectively.
On the other hand
, it is clearly noticed in the table that percentage of 65 years or
over
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older Japanese have increased in 1950
with
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to
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4.9% and it will continue to grow up to 41 % by 2055.
Finally
,
this
bar graph and table revealed that
Japan
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Japan's
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population
was at
highest
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its highest
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in the year 2005. Probably, it will go to decrease in future.
However
, the percentage of 65 years or
over
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apply
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older Japanese will
going
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go
be going
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to be increased by 2055.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words population with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.

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