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The chart and table below give information about population figures in Japan. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart and table below give information about population figures in Japan. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph and table illustrate the
population
trend
 in
Japan
 over a period of 105 Yrs. Between 1950 and 2055. The
population
 index
in
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is in
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 millions.
Overall
, it can be clearly seen from the graph that
population
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the population
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 of
Japan
initially
 experiences an upward
trend
 till about half of the period and
then
 it reflects a
down
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downtrend
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trend
. And from the
table
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,table
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it is clear that
 the percentages of
old
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the old
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 age
population
growth
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grew
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year
 by
year
. In 1950, the total
population
 of
Japan
 was about 84
million
 and, after
then
 its
population
grown
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grew
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 up
year
 by
year
 and
at the end
 of 2005, its total
population
 was 128
million
 which was approximately one and half times the total
population
 of 1950. After 2005, its
population
 started to decline rapidly, in 2055, nearly 87
million
 was its total
population
, which is approximately the
totally
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total
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 of 1950.
However
, the percentage of the
over age
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over-age
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population
 followed an upward
trend
 over the whole period.
Initially
, in 1950, its total
population
 was about 4
million
 which is about 5
percent
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per cent
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 of the total
population
 of
Japan
.
At the end
 of 2055, its
population
 increased by approximately 33
million
 which is 41% of the total
population
 of
Japan
.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, trend, japan, year, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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