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The chart and table below give information about population figures in Japan. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart and table below give information about population figures in Japan. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph and table illustrate the
population
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trend
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 in
Japan
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 over a period of 105 Yrs. Between 1950 and 2055. The
population
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 index
in
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 millions.
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, it can be clearly seen from the graph that
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population
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the population
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 of
Japan
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initially
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 experiences an upward
trend
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 till about half of the period and
then
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 it reflects a
down
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downtrend
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trend
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. And from the
table
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it is clear that
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 the percentages of
old
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the old
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 age
population
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growth
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year
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 by
year
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. In 1950, the total
population
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 of
Japan
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 was about 84
million
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 and, after
then
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 its
population
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grown
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 up
year
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 by
year
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 and
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 of 2005, its total
population
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 was 128
million
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 which was approximately one and half times the total
population
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 of 1950. After 2005, its
population
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 started to decline rapidly, in 2055, nearly 87
million
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 was its total
population
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, which is approximately the
totally
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total
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 of 1950.
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, the percentage of the
over age
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over-age
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population
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 followed an upward
trend
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 over the whole period.
Initially
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, in 1950, its total
population
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 was about 4
million
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 which is about 5
percent
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per cent
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 of the total
population
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 of
Japan
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.
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 of 2055, its
population
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 increased by approximately 33
million
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 which is 41% of the total
population
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 of
Japan
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "at the end, initially".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, trend, japan, year, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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