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Some people think that job satisfaction is more important then job security while others think that people cannot expect to enjoy a job and having a permanent job is more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #job #satisfaction #security
A decade ago, populace
spent
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spent
 most of their time doing the same
job
 for a long period of time. But, in
this
 contemporary era, masses have changed their perceptions and want
job
 contentment Over
job
 security. A lion’s share of society agrees with the
opini
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opinion
opinions
on that contentment i
s more sign
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more significant
ificant than secured
job
.
This
 essay would shed light on the phone both the view points before concluding. Myriad people opine that
job
 satisfaction is obvious due to numerous reasons.
First
 and foremost, monotony breaks through the kind of work a person intends to do.
For example
, in an Indian movie Three Idiots, R Madhavan did wonders when he listened to his interest and his heart as well and shif
ted to wi
all living things (except people) that are undomesticated
wildlife
ldlifelife photography rather than his father’s dream to out to be an engineer.
Secondly
, satis
fi
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does
ed kins does better at work place and bag promotions, high salary packages, bonuses and much more. Adding
further
 a couple of more things, contented human beings have different perception about their
life
.
Last
 but not the least,
such
 people live their
life
 m
errily with w
one or some or every or all without specification
whatsoever
hatsoever they have.
At th
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logger
e logger’s head, some folks think that secure
job
 is way better because in
this
 case employees do not tend to make mistakes as they would be penalised for the same.
Secondly
,
such
 candidates prove to be loyal towards their tasks and company as well because they know they
a
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on
in
re safe on their
job
. To pen down,
job
 satisf
action is an in
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an inevitable part
evitable
part o
Accept comma addition
job, but
f the
job
 but permanency
also
 cannot be glossed over. I firmly believe tha
t both play a si
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a significant role
gnificant role in the
life
 of an employee.

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