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Some people think that job satisfaction is more important then job security while others think that people cannot expect to enjoy a job and having a permanent job is more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #job #satisfaction #security
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A decade ago, populace
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spent
 most of their time doing the same
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 for a long period of time. But, in
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 contemporary era, masses have changed their perceptions and want
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 contentment Over
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 security. A lion’s share of society agrees with the
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opinion
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more significant
ificant than secured
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 satisfaction is obvious due to numerous reasons.
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 and foremost, monotony breaks through the kind of work a person intends to do.
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, in an Indian movie Three Idiots, R Madhavan did wonders when he listened to his interest and his heart as well and shif
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, satis
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ed kins does better at work place and bag promotions, high salary packages, bonuses and much more. Adding
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 a couple of more things, contented human beings have different perception about their
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.
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 but not the least,
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 people live their
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one or some or every or all without specification
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 is way better because in
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 case employees do not tend to make mistakes as they would be penalised for the same.
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,
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 candidates prove to be loyal towards their tasks and company as well because they know they
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re safe on their
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. To pen down,
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an inevitable part
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job, but
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 but permanency
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 cannot be glossed over. I firmly believe tha
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a significant role
gnificant role in the
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 of an employee.

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