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Many people assume that the goal of every country should be to produce more materials and goods. To what extent do you agree or disagree that constantly increasing production is an appropriate goal?

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It is often said that, the goal of every
country
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 should generate more materials and goods.I personally believe that mass production increases the availability of products for the inhabitants of the nation and enhance the revenue.
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 with, if a
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 able to generate mass production of materials and goods, it would help for inhabitant by given lots of opportunities for jobs.
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Moreover, they
 could export the materials rather than import, as imported materials cost an arm and a leg.Which is not affordable to most of the people.If we take an example of FIFA world cup footballs, the Pakistan (Sialkot) is listed in producing best football's manufacturer factories.They made it by sewing and export 40 to 60 million footballs per year.The sourced is from nearby farms.
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 helps in building the economy of
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the country
a country
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, the
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 tries to produce more materials and goods not only will people be able to use their own materials and commodities and they plan to export them to other countries with high prices.As if we produce our own domestic chores, food, machinery, make up stuff, medicine, clothes,
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 we don't need to import the branded material and
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 we have ensured that the product should best than imported material so people could buy their own manufactures.As we know that china is on top most best manufacturer in the world.They earn millions per year by exporting their best materials.If exemplify, the Thailand are limelight for their tourism, it helps to increase their revenues.Whereas the more income, the more will the
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 going to develop.If we take another example of the united states emirate they
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 have a good plan to increase their revenue by build Global village which is the tourist place where a lot of foreigners come every year and spend lots of money by which the state get the benefit. To sum up with
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, if
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the country
a country
 wants to develop or increase the income, they should produce more materials and goods through which lots of people get benefits and give their best.I highly recommend that every
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 should generate their goods and materials to fulfil the basic and domestic needs of their residents.
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