The graph below shows the number of university graduates in Canada from 1992 to 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
The graph illustrates the data of university female and male
graduates
in Canada for
over the period of 16 years from 1992 to 2007.
Change preposition
apply
Overall
, looking into
the graph the Change preposition
at
numbers
of female Fix the agreement mistake
number
graduates
in Canada were
immensely high compared to male Correct subject-verb agreement
was
graduates
throughout the given span of years.
Regarding the year 1992, female graduates
were on the hike of
nearly 99,000. Change preposition
by
While
,
males were in a steep decrease of nearly 71,000. Remove the comma
apply
However
, both femaleAdd the comma(s)
, as well as male graduates,
as well as
male graduates
had an increase in number in the year between 1994 and 1996 (approx. 1, 05,000 and 75,000 respectively). While
by the term 1998
both female and male Add a comma
,1998
graduates
had a fall in the number. Nevertheless
, by the end of the period 2006 female and male graduates
had a steady increase approx
. 1, 48,000 and 98,000 respectively.
To summarize, the numbers Change preposition
of approx
female
Change preposition
of female
graduates
were higher than male graduates
of universities in Canada for the year 1992 to 2007.Submitted by jinijohn009 on
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