Prevention is better than cure out of a country's health budget in last portion should be diverted from treatment to spending on health education and preventive measures to what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement

#prevention #cure #country #health #budget #portion #treatment #education #measures

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?

It's a true fact that if a percentage of money from health budget will be spent on providing health education and prevention rather than

more focusing on their

Suggestion

focusing more on their

treatments. I defer to

this

Linking Words

to a large extent for some reasons. My position is argued

further

Linking Words

with explanations. Out of all the reasons, the foremost one is the costly treatments

nowadays which

Accept comma addition

nowadays, which

can't be

afford

Suggestion

afforded

by every individual of that country. As day by day scientists are dealing with

great number

Suggestion

a great number

of diseases which requires a

lots

Suggestion

lot

of fund to carry on their

reaserch

systematic investigation to establish facts

research

researches

and these expenses are

compensate

Suggestion

compensated

by increasing the price of treatment. So

instead

Linking Words

of paying hefty money, we must have a proper information regarding that and that's not only good for us but

also

Linking Words

the people's who are living around us.

Additionally

Linking Words

, If everyone

have

Suggestion

has

a proper education of all the

kind

Suggestion

kinds

diseases it

Accept comma addition

diseases, it

may help them to be

prepare

Suggestion

prepared

for the upcoming which may infect them

Accept space

It can be done by broadcasting a plethora of ads on

channel

Suggestion

channels

the channel

such

Linking Words

as T.V. , billboards

Accept space

online plus much more way. From

this

Linking Words

large number of masses will be alert and pay attention towards it.

However

Linking Words

refers to the speaker or writer

would not overlook the other side too.

To begin

Linking Words

with, medicines and treatment play's

there

of them or themselves

their

their their

own role in helping public. As in case of emergency, hospitalization is a primary thing and that time doctors know much better about it.

Also

Linking Words

Accept space

they became

god

benefit

good

for us at that time.

Thus

Linking Words

to conclude the discussion

Accept space

it can

Suggestion

finally be said

finally

Linking Words

said that it is essential for us of having a guidance whereas hospitals are always there for us.

Sun Feb 23 2020

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

Paragraph 1 - Introduction

Sentence 1 - Background statement
Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
Sentence 3 - Thesis
Sentence 4 - Outline sentence

Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

Sentence 1 - Summary
Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

10
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
20
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

0123456789.0505

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

277 words

🚀 Prepare for IELTS writing section today!

Unlimited Task 1 & Task 2 checks
Practice with essays, charts, and letters.
Personalized suggestions & mistake analysis
Spot every mistake and boost your score.
Topic ideas & vocabulary helpers
Expand your ideas and use the right words.
Progress tracking
Watch your writing improve with every practice.

Topic Vocabulary:

prevention
cure
divert
health budget
treatment
health education
preventive measures
diseases
healthcare
importance
role
value
agree
disagree
position
outline
essay
state
extent
summarize

What to do next:

Look at other essays:

7
band
At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the of older people. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.
There is an idea that the population of young adults is almost more than elder people in some countries. This is a topic which has pros and cons but I think the positive points are more than the negative ones.
5
band
Nowadays many people have Access to computers on a wide basis and large number of children play computer games. What are the negative impacts of playing computer games and what can be done minimize bad effects?
These days, computer is can be accessed so easy for many people and especially children can access to computer and they play games from computer. In this case some problems arise. This issue will be discussed in this essay along with some possible solutions that may be implemented to alleviate the problem.
6
band
Nowadays, young people communicate with friends and family mostly through social networking sites, rather than other ways of communication like talking on the phone or face to face. Do you think this is a positive or negative development
In The fast-moving world, There are a lot of communication devices to interact with one another. However, young adults prefer social media such as Facebook, WhatsApp, Twitter etc instead of traditional ways of conversation like telephone and face-to-face for developing their bonding. according to me, it is a negative development as it never gives us real feelings of friendship and this can cause some social evils.
5.5
band
In some places old age is valued, while in other cultures youth is considered more important. Discuss both views and give youy opinion.
It is controversial that the elderly are crucial for their profound knowledge and experience whereas in other cultures the younger generations are regarded as the future and potential variations in numerous fields. Personally, this writer supposes that the youth may play a vital role in cutural and financial development, old citizens should be respected fairly.
6.5
band
In many countries, childhood obesity is a growing problem. What are the reasons for this and what can individuals and governments do to tackle the problem? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant experience from your own experience. Write at least 250 words.
There is no doubt that these days that increasing number of children are considered obese in different parts of the world. Although there are a variety of possible reasons for childhood obesity, steps can be taken to tackle this problem.

Prevention is better than cure out of a country's health budget in last portion should be diverted from treatment to spending on health education and preventive measures to what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement

Fully explain your ideas

Nowadays many people have Access to computers on a wide basis and large number of children play computer games. What are the negative impacts of playing computer games and what can be done minimize bad effects?

Nowadays, young people communicate with friends and family mostly through social networking sites, rather than other ways of communication like talking on the phone or face to face. Do you think this is a positive or negative development

In some places old age is valued, while in other cultures youth is considered more important. Discuss both views and give youy opinion.

In many countries, childhood obesity is a growing problem. What are the reasons for this and what can individuals and governments do to tackle the problem? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant experience from your own experience. Write at least 250 words.