IELTS Academic Writing Task 1/ Graph Writing - Bar Chart: You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The chart below shows the top ten countries with the highest spending on travel in 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
GRAPHICS in
THIS
TEST tell the reader about THE TOP TEN COUNTRIES
WITH THE HIGHEST Allocation ON TRAVEL
IN 2014. THE display of EXPENDITURE IS BASED ON THE CALCULATION OF US $tons
. COUNTRIES
from the information graph
CONTAINs CHINA
, the UNITED STATES, GERMANY, the UNITED KINGDOM, SINGAPORE, SOUTH KOREA, HONG KONG, INDIA, MALAYSIA, TAIWAN
(Republic of Correct word choice
and TAIWAN
China
/ ROC
). The GRAPH
was using MULTIPLE
OF 20 SCALES WHICH STARTS FROM 0 TO 120. THE Correct article usage
a MULTIPLE
GRAPH
was SHOWED WITH HORIZONTAL DISPLAY WHICH IS ACCOMPANIED by THE SEPARATOR LINE IN THE SCALE WITH VALUE 4. THIS
GRAPH
WAS RELATED TO THE SOURCE FROM UNWTO
COUNTRIES
WITH THE HIGHEST COSTUMER expend ON TRAVEL
2014 FALL INTO CHINA
. The number one COUNTRY WITH CONCENTRATE 110 US $tons
. Next
RATED ACCORDED TO THE UNITED STATES AND GERMANY WITH 85 US $tons
, and also
followed by the UNITED KINGDOM WITH 55 US $tons
, SOUTH KOREA AND HONG KONG WITH 20 US $tons
, INDIA WITH 15 US $tons
, then
MALAYSIA WITH 12 US $tons
. The LAST
RATED in graphic
showed by the Correct article usage
the graphic
ROC
WITH 10 US $tons
consumed. COMPARISON OF DONATE consumer ON TRAVEL
CHINA
WITH ROC
CONTAINED 100 US $tons
. As the graph
show
the purchaser EXPENDed ON Change the verb form
shows
CHINA
IS 11 TIMES LARGER THAN ROC
. THERE ARE 2 (two) COUNTRIES
THAT HAVE THE EQUALIZATION OF SPENDING COSTUMERS each other. Some COUNTRIES
IN ASIA was
telling us to CONTINUE and DOMINATE COMPARED TO OTHER continents.
The conclusion from the diagram was telling us Correct subject-verb agreement
were
about
how much money Change preposition
apply
spent
on Add a missing verb
was spent
travel
2014
. We have known the Change preposition
in 2014
People
Republic of Change noun form
People's
China
BECOMES THE BIGGEST SPENDING patron IN 2014. CHINA
NEIGHBOURING Change noun form
CHINA'S
COUNTRIES
, HONG KONG AND ROC
ARE INCLUDED. THAT ALSO
RELATED TO Add a missing verb
IS ALSO
NUMBER
OF POPULATIONS WHERE THERE ARE POTENTIALS FOR VERY BIG TRAVELSCorrect article usage
THE NUMBER
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, travel, tons, graph, china, roc with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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