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In many countries it is now illegal to smoke in public places. It is only fair that people who wish to smoke should have to leave the building. Do you agree or disagree?

#countries #smoke #places #people
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The issue of smoking and smoking bans is an emotive one because smokers and non-smokers both tend to hold strong views about their rights. Many countries have now chosen to ban smoking altogether from indoor areas and public places, which is a radical change from the way things used to be until quite recently.
Non-smokers
Suggestion
Nonsmokers
Nonsmokers'
 have been complaining for years that they should not have to breathe in other people’s
smoke
 in places
such
 as the workplace, restaurants and cafes and on buses, trains and planes. It is hard to argue that non-smokers do not have a right to be protected from
this
. Smoking
also
 causes problems for the owners and workers in
such
 places who have to clean up after smokers or redecorate more often. Generally speaking,
therefore
, I am in favour of
smoke
-free workplaces, transport and buildings.
Non-smokers
Suggestion
Nonsmokers
Nonsmokers'
 should not have other people’s
smoke
 imposed on them. We have to accept,
however
, that there are a large number of people who
smoke
 and will continue to
smoke
. Many of them enjoy the company of other smokers and feel it is unfair that they should always be made to stand in doorways when they want to
smoke
. In a consumer age that seems to put choice above everything else, shouldn’t they have the right to meet and socialise with other smokers if they want to? A more balanced policy than the one now in place in many countries would be to allow certain cafes and restaurants to apply for a smoking licence. These places would
then
 have to advertise themselves as smoking places. Certain areas of buildings
such
 as workplaces could
also
 be made into smoking rooms or
areas but
Accept comma addition
areas, but
 only if the company wished to.
Such
 measures would still give the majority their
smoke
-free
environment but
Accept comma addition
environment, but
 protect the wishes of the minority that
smoke
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • secondhand smoke
  • respiratory problems
  • cardiovascular disease
  • clean air
  • public health
  • hospital admissions
  • economic benefits
  • smoking cessation
  • cultural shift
  • healthcare costs
  • smoke-free laws
  • enforcement
  • designated smoking areas
  • compliance
  • social attitudes
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