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The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show the centre of a small town called Islip as it is now, and plans for its development. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The map illustrates some proposed
paln
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plan
plans
 for
central
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the central
a central
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 area of Islip
town
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.
Overall
Linking Words
,The main changes to the
town
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 will be a ring
road
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 around the
centre
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.Various other developments will be
a
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apply
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houses and shops. Looking at the map as it is now,we can see that
main
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the main
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road
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 runs through it is
centre
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 from west to
eadt
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east
add
eat
.The
second
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 map shows the planned
padestrian
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pedestrian
road
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.Traffic will be diverted
on to
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onto
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 a dual
carriage way
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carriageway
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 that will form a ring around the
town
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centre
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. Currently,there is a row of shops along either
sides
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side
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 of the main
road
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.The north side of
area
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the area
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planned
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is planned
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 for
bus
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the bus
a bus
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 station,shopping
centre
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,car park and new housing.The south side shops remain
same
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the same
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.The
town
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park
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park's
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 size
reduce
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reduces
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 and build more housing plans into a ring
road
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.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words town, road, centre with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pedestrian-only zone
  • dual carriageway
  • current
  • surrounded by
  • propose
  • infrastructure
  • bus station
  • car park
  • residential housing
  • traffic flow
  • connectivity
  • green spaces
  • recreational areas
  • development plans
  • main features
  • town center
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