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Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now 'one big traffic jam'. How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from using their cars?

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Over the years, owning a
car
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 has become quite common. An increase in the per capita income of people in many countries has resulted in higher discretionary spending, and
as a result
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, owning a
car
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 has become quite common.
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,
this
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 has lead to serious
traffic
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 jam in many cities. In my opinion, a lot of cities around the world are facing serious issues with
traffic
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 and the governments must take action against
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 alarming problem. In many developing countries like India
,
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Indonesia, and Thailand, the surge in
car
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 sales during the past thirty years has led to severe
traffic
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 problems in many cities.
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, ABC news published a report, which highlighted Delhi, Bangalore, and Mumbai are some of the cities having the worst
traffic
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 jams in the world. The situation is so bad that a
commute
a special group delegated to consider some matter
committee
 of two to three miles can take up to several hours in these cities. Governments have to start
demotivating
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 people from owning more cars and provide alternatives. The public transport system of
effected
acted upon; influenced
affected
 cities can be improved to tackle the
traffic
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 jam. Incentives can be given in the form of reduced fare price to
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 accelerate
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 transition process.
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, the government can launch advertisements that educate people on the negative impacts of their actions. In conclusion, the rising trend in
car
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 ownership is posing a serious threat to
traffic
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 in many cities around the world. Some of the key solutions that Government can implement to stop
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 problem are to develop a better public transportation system and launch advertisements that encourage people to look for other alternatives.
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