The percentage of overweight children in western society has increased by almost 20% in the last ten years. Discuss the causes and effects of this disturbing trend.

Children’s
Suggestion
Child
health care is one of the concerns of their parents and society. Due to the change of people’s diet and lifestyle in
past few decades
Suggestion
the past few decades
, increased percentage of obese children is a serious concern. Regarding
this
problem,
this
essay will discuss about their diet and lifestyle as its causes and effects on their life. Since the rapid grow of fast-food restaurants, children and their parents are easy to get access to those restaurants.
However
, those restaurants provide high calorie food
such
as fried potatoes, hamburgers, and juice, which contain large amount of sugars. Those are nutritiously imbalanced food and it is not suitable to provide for children. If children eat those
food
Suggestion
foods
frequently, they might get extra calories, which is far higher than the required calories for them.
Consequently
,
this
may lead them to overweight for their age group. Another reason of the increasing
number
of obese children in western society is rooted in their lifestyles. The unprecedented improvement of technology and various
number
Suggestion
numbers
of TV games, children are likely to play inside rather than go outside to play soccer or baseball. It is clear that the
number
of children, who are allowed to use
devises
an inclination or desire; used in the plural in the phrase 'left to your own devices'
devices
such
as computers, iPads and smartphone, has been increased in past decades. Because of
this
, smaller
number
of children play outside of their house. Those
overweighting
cause serious effects on children’s life. As the example of
this
, they may be buried by other children at school.
As a result
of
this
, they might refuse to go to school and lose their self-confidence. Co-occurred health problem would be another problem. Because of the
overweighting
, they may not be able to do enough exercise which are expected for their age groups.
Consequently
, those obese children cannot train their muscles and
strengthen of their
Suggestion
strengthen their
bones. To conclude, increased
number
of overweight children in western countries should take seriously in the world. With regards of those causes and effects, people should consider their children’s diet and lifestyles.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overweight
  • obesity
  • caloric intake
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • screen time
  • physical education
  • nutritious
  • psychological well-being
  • self-esteem
  • socioeconomic
  • healthcare system
  • life expectancy
  • obesity-related complications
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