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The bar graph below shows the percentage growth in average property prices in three different countries between 2007 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar graph below shows the percentage growth in average property prices in three different countries between 2007 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart illustrates the average rate
increase
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 in
property
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cost
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 in three various countries, namely
Algeria
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,
China
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, and Argentina, from 2007 until 2010.
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, the most noticeable trend in the average growth
increase
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 on
property
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cost
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 is that
Algeria
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 fell dramatically over time,
while
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China
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 consistently increased year by year until the end. Argentina fluctuated throughout the given period. The average
property
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 rate of
Algeria
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 started just above 6% in 2007 was the highest figure among the three nations, upon which it dropped to 4.5% a year after and
then
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 continued to decline to just over 3.5% in 2009 at which it ended
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 3% in 2010, almost twice below than the percentage rate of
china
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. In 2007,
China
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's average
property
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cost
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 was almost three times lower than
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Algeria
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Algeria's
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 at 2%
in
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apply
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2007 but consistently
increase
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 in the subsequent years, reaching almost 6.5% in 2010, surpassing
Algeria
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's number in 2007,
while
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 Argentina's average
cost
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increase
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 fluctuated to just under 5% and just above 1% throughout the given period from 2007 until 2010.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words increase, property, cost, algeria, china with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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