Some people think that it is the responsibility of governments to take care of the environment, while others believe that it is the responsibility of the citizens. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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As we all know, our environment is mostly comprised of land, water and air. There is an ongoing debate regarding, who should take care of the
surroundings
. Some believe it should be the government,
while
others argue that it is everyone's responsibility. I tend to agree with the former statement, that it has to be the government, who should take care of the environment by implementing strict laws. First and foremost, authorities should implement bylaws and anyone who pollutes the
surroundings
should be fined
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.
This
has been a bigger issue in developing nations as citizens feel privileged by breaking the law. As per the research by the University of Michigan, Tourists from India, behave in a lot more civilised way when travelling to
western
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countries
.
In contrast
to travelling in their own country. It is because, outside of India, they are scared of laws and fines imposed on them, which are more than 10 times what they pay back in their home country.
On the other hand
, no country can achieve greatness without the support of
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citizens. Nowadays, People around the world are motivated to keep their
surroundings
clean.
Also
,
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of many
countries
are
tourist dependent
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, so it is a must for them.
For example
, Sri Lanka, an Island in the Indian Ocean is considered the cleanest among all the South Asian
countries
. As they are aware, cleanliness attracts tourists.
As a result
, many
countries
followed the same path and numerous movements
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started on a bigger scale in keeping the
surroundings
healthy. In conclusion, despite awareness of keeping
habitat
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clean, mischievous people do pollute it in one way or another.
Therefore
, in my opinion, it should be the government, who should take care of the environment by implementing high fines and keeping laws strict.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainable practices
  • environmental protection
  • grassroots movements
  • community-led initiatives
  • policy implementation
  • regulations
  • funding
  • innovative solutions
  • collective effort
  • advocate
  • enforce laws
  • energy-efficient
  • reduce waste
  • recycling
  • sustainable outcomes
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