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Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now 'one big traffic jam'. How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from using their cars?

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Especially in the past thirty years
car
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 ownership had increased rapidly because of the consistently increasing
car
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 demand in the society.
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 fact has some consequences; many cities, particularly the
metropoles
a large and densely populated urban area; may include several independent administrative districts
metropolis
, are now suffering from
traffic
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. As a resident in the heart of a
metropole
a large and densely populated urban area; may include several independent administrative districts
metropolis
, Istanbul, I can easily say that individual
car
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 ownership made our
city one big
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city into one big
traffic
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 jam. I will discuss how can
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 issue be resolved.
First
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 of all, the main problem is to decrease the individual
car
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 ownership. In order to decrease the usage, the best way is to invest
on
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in
 public
transportation
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. Public busses play a
great
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greater
 role in public
transportation
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. One can say that individual cars are more comfortable and quicker. But an increase in the quantity of busses and bus routes, can produce a shift towards busses.
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, decreasing the
transportation
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 fees can be an option. In the long run, the best option for public
transportation
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 is
metro
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a metro
, since
its
it is
it's
 cheap, quick and comfortable. Increasing the number of vehicles and constructing new stations would give
traffic
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 a breath.
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transportation
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, an additional tax can be introduced
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to
 a family who wants to buy an additional
car
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.
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, a family consisting of two adults, can buy only one personal vehicle. For the
second
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 vehicle, they have to pay an additional tax. And that additional tax can be used to supply public
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. Restricting the
usage
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use
 of individual vehicles will
also
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 decrease the rates of air pollution. But personally, I am not a fan of restricting people’s personal intentions, but anyway that can provide a solution. In conclusion, there are several ways to prevent our cities being a big
traffic
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 jam. Governments have lots of things to prevent
traffic
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. But the
first
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 thing is, they should promote public
transportation
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.

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